tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2109150351375891279.post5320454353000101040..comments2023-05-26T13:58:00.927-07:00Comments on Mathie x Pensive: 200: No ReasonGregory Taylorhttp://www.blogger.com/profile/06547180132612659893noreply@blogger.comBlogger5125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2109150351375891279.post-37195827666745626352015-08-20T13:01:26.786-07:002015-08-20T13:01:26.786-07:00Thanks! I like playing with expectations, so I'...Thanks! I like playing with expectations, so I'm glad that worked out. Fun fact, I had the ending scene in my head before I started writing, so this was more "what could cause such an error in judgement" as opposed to "what could give this woman hope again".<br /><br />I'm now curious about your ending - would it have been Marie trying to say something totally different, to alter the course of her life? (Sometimes I wonder whether old shows I've seen are subconsciously influencing me...)Gregory Taylorhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/06547180132612659893noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2109150351375891279.post-66926311537810752772015-08-20T12:52:59.096-07:002015-08-20T12:52:59.096-07:00To be fair, Marie didn't strike me as the type...To be fair, Marie didn't strike me as the type who explained herself very well. I think she also wanted out of her present day living. As to the nature of normal time retrieval, it did occur to me that she could reclaim Al that way (her line "Forever" was originally "Probably Forever") but I wasn't sure if I would need to explain that for readers, plus she might not want to revisit him depending on how much she changed in that time. Figured I'd let the reader decide, but maybe it became a plot hole?<br /><br />I'm glad you liked the end! It was that scene, coupled with Marie's "like normal" rant that sparked the whole thing.Gregory Taylorhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/06547180132612659893noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2109150351375891279.post-74473541867185073222015-08-20T07:14:11.965-07:002015-08-20T07:14:11.965-07:00Nice little twist. Didn't go where I might hav...Nice little twist. Didn't go where I might have expected it to. (That's a plus!)<br /><br />Actually, I don't know whether my ending would make for decent flash fiction or was already done on a Twilight Zone type story decades ago.(x, why?)https://www.blogger.com/profile/17499160002806879025noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2109150351375891279.post-70540721990432070022015-08-20T07:14:03.544-07:002015-08-20T07:14:03.544-07:00Nice little twist. Didn't go where I might hav...Nice little twist. Didn't go where I might have expected it to. (That's a plus!)<br /><br />Actually, I don't know whether my ending would make for decent flash fiction or was already done on a Twilight Zone type story decades ago.(x, why?)https://www.blogger.com/profile/17499160002806879025noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2109150351375891279.post-36712638731199557342015-08-20T07:08:52.049-07:002015-08-20T07:08:52.049-07:00I thought she was ending her association with Al b...I thought she was ending her association with Al because she received him at 14, which was conflated with the conversation when she was 12. (Bad reader.) I like Al's voice, but was confused as he was with Marie's urgency. Also, why deactivate him? Even traveling through time normally, she could pick him up again at 72 years of age with no time passing for him. But I love the hopeful note at the end. John Goldenhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/18212162438307044259noreply@blogger.com