tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2109150351375891279.post4284946208283321438..comments2023-05-26T13:58:00.927-07:00Comments on Mathie x Pensive: Time Trippers: Chapter 7AGregory Taylorhttp://www.blogger.com/profile/06547180132612659893noreply@blogger.comBlogger5125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2109150351375891279.post-6550098339054201792014-07-19T09:58:56.999-07:002014-07-19T09:58:56.999-07:00That's a good point. Beyond first-second-third...That's a good point. Beyond first-second-third I don't tend to delve into the nuances of POV, and I can see how some stories are better served through that choice. So much overhead before putting pencil to paper sometimes!<br />As for dialogue, I believe mine to be very utilitarian. If it doesn't further the character or the plot, I much prefer to tool around inside a single character's head. No idea if that's how it's perceived, or if it's actually coming across like that.Gregory Taylorhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/06547180132612659893noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2109150351375891279.post-72310766519153007682014-07-13T16:16:53.740-07:002014-07-13T16:16:53.740-07:00"I don't think I can do things both ways...."I don't think I can do things both ways."<br /><br />You actually can if you set it up omniscient point of view, but I think this is one of the harder POVs to write in successfully. The bigger question, however, is what is the right POV for this story?<br /><br />Oh, and give yourself credit for dialogue. I know many writers who find it very difficult and avoid writing it, but good dialogue has a way bringing the work to life.Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2109150351375891279.post-76606112457377869202014-07-13T16:12:56.430-07:002014-07-13T16:12:56.430-07:00This comment has been removed by the author.Sonalhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/17319163884835583251noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2109150351375891279.post-30773552046901738952014-07-09T13:43:43.882-07:002014-07-09T13:43:43.882-07:00Thanks, I appreciate the response! I'm starti...Thanks, I appreciate the response! I'm starting to feel like I am very much a character writer. The dialogue thing is interesting though, seeing as I've never considered that a strength. As far as the ending goes, as written in 1999 it was intended to be a mid-Chapter "commercial break", if you will, to keep people from tuning out after the (in my mind) necessary info dump.<br /><br />Point of View. Yeah, it's been recently brought to my attention that I am NOT good at this... it's like I want to be inside the characters' heads, getting at their motivations - yet at the same time, I want to be able to describe things in broad strokes. I don't think I can do things both ways. I wonder whether my first person writing efforts come across as any better owing to the need to remain in a single head... definitely something to work on at least. Thanks again.Gregory Taylorhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/06547180132612659893noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2109150351375891279.post-72415300613035333792014-07-08T06:14:59.076-07:002014-07-08T06:14:59.076-07:00I know you've been looking for feedback, so he...I know you've been looking for feedback, so here is my 60-second take on writing craft in this excerpt.<br /><br />Strong points: Excellent job at creating character through dialogue and voice, particularly Frank; active plot drives the narrative forward; ending of this excerpt creates strong narrative tension.<br /><br />Needs some work: POV shifts, both between characters and moving between close-third and editorial omniscient, creates distance and reduces narrative tension; second half of the excerpt is heavily expository drags down the story.Anonymousnoreply@blogger.com